Guhhhh...what is the matter with you woman!? This is good! The only thing I will say is that Grimmjow is not the kind of character to be "giddy". Just my opinion. Also, in the second to last paragraph here it says "thumps catching the edges..." and i'm guessing you mean "thumbs".
As far as the actual writing goes? This is very nice. It has a nice build-up and the imagery is very real and easy to follow. Continue! Continue! And do it soon because good Grimmichi is hard to find. *pout*
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Guhhhh...what is the matter with you woman!? This is good! The only thing I will say is that Grimmjow is not the kind of character to be "giddy". Just my opinion. Also, in the second to last paragraph here it says "thumps catching the edges..." and i'm guessing you mean "thumbs".
As far as the actual writing goes? This is very nice. It has a nice build-up and the imagery is very real and easy to follow. Continue! Continue! And do it soon because good Grimmichi is hard to find. *pout*